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28 November 2003 @ 15:34 Memories
Gold Tinted Spectacles - Chapter Listing  
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Re-Edited 11th February 2004
Title: Gold Tinted Spectacles
Author: Beren (aka Didi)
Email: beren@dtwins.co.uk
Pairing: Harry/Draco
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: This story is based on characters and situations created and owned by JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros., Inc. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.
Warnings: This story is set post OOTP and therefore has SPOLIERS. If you don't want to know anything that went on in book five do not read this story.
Genre: Slash
Summary: Harry is about to enter his seventh year, and things are not quite what he expected. He is no longer the angry boy who watched his world fall apart at the end of his fifth year, but neither has he completely found his place yet. He is looking for someting, and to his confusion it seems to have something to do with Draco Malfoy.
Author's Notes: Thanks to everyone who posted feedback when I was uploading this in parts and after it was finished. This is the re-edited version which hopefully removes the mistakes that people spotted and improves on the original draft.
As always I have to thank my beta - she re-read this for me to make sure I hadn't edited in any mistakes :).
This is NOT a work in progress, the story is FINISHED.


01/40 A Beginning 02/40 Talking 03/40 More Than Talking 04/40 More ... Just More
05/40 Revelations 06/40 The Room 07/40 Reality 08/40 Sharing
09/40 The Passing of Time 10/40 Plans and Practice 11/40 Through the Wards 12/40 A Bad Idea
13/40 Explanations 14/40 The Aftermath 15/40 Coaching and Other Pastimes 16/40 Nerves
17/40 Consequences 18/40 Resolutions and Allergies 19/40 Lessons 20/40 From the Big Wide World
21/40 "I always knew there were people who didn't like me"
22/40 A Birthday 23/40 London and Back Again 24/40 A Very Weasley Christmas  
25/40 Of Snowballs and Other Weapons 26/40 Discussions 27/40 The Ways of Slytherins
28/40 Divination 29/40 Peace Talks 30/40 Home? 31/40 Defence
32/40 No Longer Fightening 33/40 Father and Son 34/40 Blake House 35/40 Holding On
36/40 Waking and Sleeping 37/40 Apologies 38/40 Traitors and Heroes 39/40 An Ending
40/40 A New Beginning      


The End

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thallosthallos on 29th November 2003 20:30 (UTC)
a lot to read, that's great !!
thank you one more time for the LJ code by the way and for friending me back (you didn't have to ^^;;;)
Berenberen_writes on 29th November 2003 20:34 (UTC)
No problem, when it comes to LJ friends, the more the merrier I say :).
acony_bell on 1st December 2003 04:43 (UTC)
You know...
December 1st cannot come fast enough for me.

In all honesty, my favorite ship is Draco/Hermione, with Draco/Harry coming a close second. But wow, I love your story. It's November 30, 2003...10:42pm, Central Standard Time...

Can December 1st hurry up and get here? LoL.

Sorry for the silly post, but I feel obsessive checking your journal every day to see if you've updated. Don't mind me.
Tashatasha27 on 1st December 2003 07:37 (UTC)
Re: You know...
Thank you, I'm glad you're still enjoying the fic. And I'm coding up some of the parts now. I'm just waiting for the last chapter to fall into my in box.
your last chance to discospinnacle on 2nd December 2003 01:57 (UTC)
I ADORE Gold Tinted Spectacles, and I think the title's brilliant with the plot. Anyways, December 8th has to get here quicker. I'll be one year older when the last five chapters come out! (What a wonderful belated birthday present).

Anyways, thanks for writing such a great H/D fic. It's rare to find one as nicely written, laid out and grammatically correct.

Take care<3
Berenberen_writes on 2nd December 2003 08:10 (UTC)
Thank you very much. Glad you like the title ... I haven't had many comments about that, except someone who didn't get it because the chapters about Hecatemae hadn't come out yet :). It took ages to decide on the title; I had a huge list that I threw back and forth with my sister until she liked one of them.

I'll be one year older when the last five chapters come out!
So will I and my beta (twin sister) and my husband for that matter :). My whole family are December and January babies: my Dad's the worst: his birthday is the 24th Dec :). Do have a happy birthday.

Sometimes I wonder why I decided to start posting before Christmas ... I couldn't have chosen a busier time in our house ::g::.

Thanks again.
(no subject) - spinnacle on 2nd December 2003 23:42 (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - beren_writes on 3rd December 2003 07:40 (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - spinnacle on 3rd December 2003 22:36 (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - beren_writes on 3rd December 2003 23:41 (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - spinnacle on 4th December 2003 00:45 (UTC) (Expand)
dancernldancernl on 14th December 2003 01:20 (UTC)
I adore your writing style. The plot is a bit too racy for my taste, but I really commend you for taking so many risks. Cheers!
~Nikki
Berenberen_writes on 15th December 2003 08:41 (UTC)
Thank you.
the dark cavalier: Woods Faerie (by ladyjaida)cerulean_sky on 15th December 2003 21:59 (UTC)
I would just like to say that the next installment is going to be put up on my birthday. I know this wasn't intentional, but thank you anyway!! :D

>:D<

<3
Berenberen_writes on 15th December 2003 22:03 (UTC)
Then I very much hope you will like it :). Happy Birthday for then.
(no subject) - cerulean_sky on 15th December 2003 22:04 (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - beren_writes on 15th December 2003 22:21 (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - cerulean_sky on 15th December 2003 22:24 (UTC) (Expand)
non_standardnon_standard on 15th December 2003 23:06 (UTC)
your a goddess.
i love how its coming along.
and *dun dun dun* i feel all kool n stuff cuz the next 5 chapters come out day before my birthday.
Berenberen_writes on 16th December 2003 14:19 (UTC)
Glad you like it so far.
Happy birthday for next Tuesday.
I can only be invisible if you're not lookingellixis on 23rd December 2003 20:08 (UTC)
Oooh, cliffhangers are ever so frustrating! Can't wait for the final installment.
Berenberen_writes on 24th December 2003 09:05 (UTC)
I swear I didn't realise quite what a cliff hanger I managed to leave :). I know what's going to happen next and it didn't occur to me quite how precarious the situation is at the end of Chapter 35.

Glad you're enjoying the fic :).
Ash: Ashleigh:colorswaraitai on 24th December 2003 06:12 (UTC)
I don't know where to start. I friended you a while back, kept seeing your updates, but was always unable to start reading GTS until now. I've successfully read all 35 chapters in one sitting [minus a drive to a different house/computer].

It's simply magnificent. I love the plot you've put it, the way you don't seem to be repetitive with anything. You definitely know you're way around a grammar book, and I love your word choice.

Also, your tasteful insertion of plot twists and sex scenes are much appreciated! [Plus who doesn't love when Ron is used as a comic relief! Also loved how you portrayed Smith at the DA meeting *shakes fist at him.*]

I'm so glad I've gotten to read this fic and will be sad to know that I won't be able to read the final chapters until the 4th or 5th of January.

Anyway! Great work, I hope you keep writing for a long time. I know that when I look at my icon, I'll always think of the colors as something different, now. :) Can't wait for a sequel, even if it does take six months!

Cheers and good luck!

Ashleigh
Berenberen_writes on 24th December 2003 09:28 (UTC)
I've successfully read all 35 chapters in one sitting [minus a drive to a different house/computer].
I'm honoured, that must have taken a while (takes me a while to read it and I wrote it :)).

It's simply magnificent.
Thank you very much.

You definitely know you're way around a grammar book,
Sometimes I do :) ... but that accolade must go to my beta reader, Soph, who's understanding of the use of the comma has saved the world from my murderous use (or lack of use) of said device ::g::.

and I love your word choice.
Thanks - I enjoy the English language, although some find my style a little eccentric :).

Thank you very much for your kind words, they mean a great deal to me.
Merry Christmas.

(Anonymous) on 29th December 2003 13:10 (UTC)
i have to say gold tinted spectacles would have to be the best harry/draco story i have read in a long time hope you do a sequel to it cause i didnt want it to end
Berenberen_writes on 29th December 2003 13:32 (UTC)
Thank you very much, yes there is a sequel in the works, but it will be some time I'm afraid.
(no subject) - mysteryqueen on 11th September 2004 20:17 (UTC) (Expand)
thamodis: dreamerthamodis on 30th December 2003 05:16 (UTC)
Gold Tinted Spectacles is just amazing. I loved the interactions between Harry and Draco. I was also impressed that there was an actual conflict in the story. With Harry/Draco you see so much pointless fluff, and it is nice to see a writer who acknowledges that there should be a conflict (and resolution) in their fiction. It's also refreshing to see a fic that is finished. Thank you and, for lack of anything better to say, keep up the good work!
Berenberen_writes on 31st December 2003 16:05 (UTC)
Thank you very much, I'm so glad you enjoyed the fic. I've had a great deal of fun posting it over the last couple of months. As to the conflict and resolution, for me that's what drives a story. I like fluff every now and then but I prefer to read it integrated into a larger picture which is why I write it that way as well.

Thanks again.
PANganesha9687 on 4th January 2004 03:11 (UTC)
uh...omg...
what..... an....

AMAZING

... story. you are an absolute genius (and MUCH kudos to your sister as well)... i dont even know what to say. WELL DONE, didi.
PANganesha9687 on 4th January 2004 08:29 (UTC)
Re: uh...omg...
uhhmm... can you please please please inform me when the sequel is up?
(Anonymous) on 5th January 2004 02:11 (UTC)
not to be nit-picky .. but the Harry in the picture has no scar .. i duno i just noticed that after i saw it when i actually was allowed to be reading your fics and not procrastinating my work .. o well .. just thought id alert the media ..
oh yeah and i cant leave this thing without complimenting you, YOU'RE AWESOME AND YOUR STORY RULES .. okay i'm done
laYtr
Berenberen_writes on 5th January 2004 07:25 (UTC)
but the Harry in the picture has no scar
Yes he does :). It's poking out from under his fringe just above his right eyebrow. I know it's there because I managed to bury it when colouring the piccie and had to reorganise the layers to put it back :).

And thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed the fic.
(no subject) - (Anonymous) on 5th January 2004 22:23 (UTC) (Expand)
chibi_slash on 20th January 2004 16:33 (UTC)
Wow...
*Fangirl happy dance* Finished reading it; absolutly wonderful! Simple as that. There's nothing more that can be said other than that you have a gift and that GTS has to be one of the best Harry/Draco slash stories I've ever read. (And I'm pretty picky about what I call good stuff! ^_~)

Absolutly wonderful.
Berenberen_writes on 20th January 2004 16:37 (UTC)
Re: Wow...
Thank you very much, I'm very pleased you enjoyed it. I'm working on a final re-edit at the moment to take out the few problems that readers have spotted over time.

Thank you again.
liljademoonliljademoon on 25th January 2004 20:16 (UTC)
Bravo
I first found your story on DaBeagle and read the first 21 chapters there. I loved all of them. When I found the completed version here I had to read it all. I love it! It's well written and keeps even a picky reader like me interested. Definitely has become one of my fav online stories.
Berenberen_writes on 27th January 2004 07:28 (UTC)
Re: Bravo
Thank you very much, glad you enjoyed it. I hope you enjoy the sequel when it's finally written.
(Anonymous) on 26th January 2004 21:25 (UTC)
Some (hopefully) constructive criticism
You clearly have talent. This story shows much potential, I think. The whole idea of Hecatemae is quite brilliant, and I particularly like the idea that they need another person to keep them sane.

There are, however, some things which could be improved. These are just my opinions, but maybe they can be of use. Firstly, there are some choices of words that could be done differently. Such phrases as the dark-haired youth or the blond Slytherin are good when used sparingly. That way they retain their freshness. Instead, you could use their names or just the personal pronouns.

Also, I think that adverbs should be used with great caution. A writer should always think twice before he/she uses them. He/She should as whether it's absolutely necessary to use an adverb or would the reader get the meaning without it. I'll give an example. From chapter 3:

"I'm in love, really in love," he said honestly which stopped all sound coming from the young woman's mouth.

Is the word honestly necessary? I realize this is a small detail, but I think it's worth mentioning. But don't worry, even professional writers make this mistake. J.K. Rowling is a good example.

Then to characterization and plot. There were a lot of good parts there, but again I'm going to start with those parts I think could benefit from improvement. Bear with me. :-)

First of all, I found it a bit unconvincing that Harry and Draco's relationship developed so fast, and that they didn't have more problems either with moving past all that shit that has accumulated during the past years or with others accepting their relationship. Maybe you could have described their growing friendship and love in more detail. I mean the part before they had sex the first time.

Some of the later parts could have been a bit shorter, or alternatively you could have added some tension between Harry and Draco (and I don't mean sexual tension) or between Draco and other Gryffindors. I would have spiced the fic up. Sorry I can't be more specific. It's only a vague feeling I have.

Also, you have some problems with punctuation, I think. I'm not an expert on this subject, as English is not my native language. But I think there is an easy way to improve punctuation. Read your fic alound, and keep a short pause in commas place and a longer one in full stops place. You can also use semi-colons; where a comma is not enough but a full stop feels too much, a semi-colon is often a good option.

Well, what did I like then? As I already said, the idea of Hecatemae is pure genius. I liked Zacharias Smiths reaction to Harry and Draco's relationship. I think it's brilliant that there is a difference between the way the purebloods and the Muggle-borns react to homosexuality. I also liked Mad-Eye Moody's reaction. I think it was very convincing.

It was also interesting to see the interaction between Draco and Pansy. It was very believable. The Slytherins look out for themselves. For all they pureblooded bigotrism, they can be very practical. When they are not being irrational like Draco is in canon.

I'm very curious about Hilde. There's something weird about her. She's too likeable, and I can't help being suspicious. I guess she has some part to play in the sequel.

But what is my favourite part in the whole fic? This may come as a surprise, but it's from chapter 1.

"Welcome to our side," the words came out of Harry's mouth before he had even realised he was going to say them.

All the things he had been seeing over the past two days all added up in his brain and that phrase popped out of his mouth. Harry was actually quite surprised himself. For a moment Malfoy just stood there and stared and then his eye's hardened.

"He swore he wouldn't tell anyone," the blond boy hissed through his teeth. "I should have known that meddling old man couldn't be trusted."


That's exactly the reaction I would have expected from Draco.

-Helka Maria-
Berenberen_writes on 27th January 2004 08:41 (UTC)
Re: Some (hopefully) constructive criticism
Firstly, thank you for taking the time to reply in detail. I'm glad you enjoyed the fic.

Such phrases as the dark-haired youth or the blond Slytherin are good when used sparingly.
Being dealt with :). I'm re-editing the fic at the moment. For myself, I like epithets (some of my readers seem to as well), but it obviously annoys some readers, hence a re-evaluation of their use. I'm up to chapter seven so far.

Also, I think that adverbs should be used with great caution.
Here I do not agree I'm afraid. I think adverbs add colour and richness to a narative. It's definitely a style choice but one that I will stick to. In your chosen example the 'honestly' gives empasis to Harry's whole mindset. The entire purpose of the conversation is to illustrate that Harry is uncomfortable with the situation he finds himself in and cannot bring himself to lie to Hermione. The fact that he can be blatantly honest with her is very important even though he qualifies it later by telling her that there are things he cannot reveal. The meaning may have been obvious without the adverb, but the emphasis is lost.

On to the development of the relationship :). There relationship did evolve quite fast (well not as fast as some fics I've seen, but definitely quite rapidly), however, that was the point ::G::. Hmm ... let's see if I can explain my reasoning. What had been between them before is childish fighting; Draco has really only been a blip on Harry's radar of bad things since the Triwizard tournament. There's no doubt he severly dislikes Draco through OotP, but Sirius' death reduced him to even less importance. I think Harry was over their school boy hatred long before the story begins even though I'm sure he rose to the bait on many occasions in his sixth year because he is a Gryffindor after all.

Once Draco meets Voldemort and has the run in with his father he does some growing up as well. What had been between him and Harry before is irrelevant. His world view has altered so dramatically that he doesn't care about that any more.

I didn't want to report too much of the three weeks before the first kiss because it's not important. What is important is the first meeting where Draco rejects Harry's offer of friendship out of hand. Then the meeting where intial offers of trust are made. Then you have three weeks of chit chat that build on the foundations laid, and the content of which is rather mundane. Then you have the kiss - which rather shocks Harry, and since it's from his POV there can't really be that much build up. After which point everything moves rather fast and has Harry in somewhat of a daze, hence reporting the significant moments rather than the whole thing.

Does that make any sense?

On to some of the other parts could have been shorter:

I am a firm believer in, 'if the scene has no point take it out'. I ripped out all the parts I didn't think were necessary and everything I left in illustrated a point I was trying to convey. I don't know what could have been shorter.

As to adding in tension between Harry and Draco - there isn't any. They may gripe at each other occasionally but there is no overiding tension, which is rather the underlying nature of their relationship.

Tension between the Gryffindors and Draco - didn't want that either. I think the Gryffindors have been idiots one too many times and they might actually have learnt from their mistakes; hence the unified front. There have probably been many minor disagreements as there always are between friends, but they weren't important to the plot. Besides, there nothing Gryffindors like more than a convert to the light :). The nature of Draco and Harry's relationship makes it impossible for him to be a spy unless Harry is one himself, hence no threat.

The tension was designed to come from the Slytherins: the unknown factor. From the moment in Hogsmeade it is known that there is someone who hates Harry with a passion. This builds through the incident with Draco to the point where his father kidnaps him and is not resolved until Blaise is discovered to be the traitor. This was the important conflict and hence the only conflict I wanted to highlight.

cont in next post
Re: Some (hopefully) constructive criticism - beren_writes on 27th January 2004 08:42 (UTC) (Expand)
Re: Some (hopefully) constructive criticism - (Anonymous) on 27th January 2004 13:00 (UTC) (Expand)
Re: Some (hopefully) constructive criticism - (Anonymous) on 27th January 2004 13:26 (UTC) (Expand)
Re: Some (hopefully) constructive criticism - beren_writes on 27th January 2004 13:36 (UTC) (Expand)
=D> - pureblood_pride on 18th February 2004 21:29 (UTC) (Expand)
Re: =D> - beren_writes on 18th February 2004 21:59 (UTC) (Expand)
Re: =D> - nightsinger on 24th September 2004 22:02 (UTC) (Expand)
Re: =D> - beren_writes on 26th September 2004 23:28 (UTC) (Expand)
Paper Mulberrypapermulberry on 28th January 2004 17:49 (UTC)
Thank you so much for this story. I don't usually review, as I'm too lazy for that, but you have entertained me over the past 4 or 5 months (yes, it took me that long to read ^^) and I wanted to thank you for that. Your story is lovely and left me aching for more at the end. There will be a sequel right? I do hope so, as you can't leave it at this :)

Well, anyway, well done! Keep up the good work!

-Paper Mulberry

ps. Mind if I add you as a friend?
Berenberen_writes on 28th January 2004 18:36 (UTC)
Thank you very much, so glad you enjoyed it. Yes there is a sequel in the works :). I'm actually re-editing GTS at the moment for errors people pointed out, but it's helping to bring bits of the second one into focus, which is a bonus.

Feel free to friend away, I'll friend you back.

Thanks again.
(Anonymous) on 4th February 2004 04:12 (UTC)
story
love the story! it's totally the best. wondering if you will write a sequel, but if not, still the greatest. thanks for a wonderful story.
Berenberen_writes on 4th February 2004 07:24 (UTC)
Re: story
Yes there will be a sequel. I'm re-editing GTS at the moment and will be reposting shortly, but then I'm going to go back to writing the sequel. The end of it came to me in a blinding flash of inspiration on Saturday morning so I now know where it's all working to which is very useful ::g::. Of course that still leaves a whole chunk of middle to come up with, but I have outlines for most of the important bits.

Glad you liked GTS, thank you for commenting.
(Anonymous) on 4th February 2004 15:16 (UTC)
This is an excellent story
Beren--

I just finished reading the story all the way through for the second time. This is excellent. I have a lot of respect for those who can weave a plot like this -- wizarding, witchcraft and supernatural, and seem to tie up all the ends. And then the plot. You write with a lot of emotion, and that's why I really love. You manage to convey the love between Harry and Draco, as well as the passion. And you created such tension with Draco's kidnapping that I was exhausted at the end of those chapters. I know how hard it is to do that, and you did it so well. I am really looking forward to the sequel, but don't let anyone rush you into it. Write at your pace, and with the precision, emotion and care you took with the first story. I am eager to read the sequel, but not so eager that I can't wait for your careful craftsmanship.

I do have one question, though. Would Harry and Draco have such a deep love without the Hecatemus bond? I mean, could that passion exist if Harry hadn't needed Draco as his "balance"? I need to know that their love is not based on an artificial device of the need to bond. I know that they are soulmates magically; are they also soulmates outside of that magic tie? Is the magic the "drug" that fuels their passion, or vice-versa? And please, don't let that passion fade or take a back seat as they grow into their new roles. That underlying love is the foundation for me.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us. I look forward to more.

Journeyman
Berenberen_writes on 5th February 2004 07:48 (UTC)
Re: This is an excellent story
Thank you very much, I'm very pleased you enjoyed it. I'm flattered that you feel my writing is emotionally engaging. I tend to write 'from the seat of my pants', to coin a phrase ::g::. I start a scene and just keep going until it comes to a halt, without much planning on what is actually going on other than the plot points that need to be highlighted. Sometimes the scenes change to something completely different than what I had intended by the time they're done :).

Would Harry and Draco have such a deep love without the Hecatemus bond?
I think the bond forced them into it faster than they would have done normally, but I firmly believe the passion was there to begin with. It was the bond that drew them together, but only after they had made the initial steps themselves. After all if it had been just the bond they would have initiated something far sooner I would have thought. They have been pushed together their entire adolescent lives and if the bond was going to override everything and take away all their choices I think it would have happened when Harry woke up to the fact that it was possible to be atracted to someone and Draco would have been his first target, not Cho :).

The bond upped the anti, but they would have found the passion eventually themselves. They are perfect for each other after all: light and dark; fire and ice; courage and cunning.
Sumire: Dracaenalady_suzuran on 4th February 2004 22:59 (UTC)
I heard about this story when you first started posting at Fiction Alley, but being a lazy procrastinator, I figured I'd leave it for another day. Two weeks ago, I finally read it, and after reading a second, third and fourth time, I hit myself on the head for being an idiot and not getting to it sooner.

I have to say, this is one of the more original H/D fics out there, and I've read a lot of them. I'm glad that Harry didn't turn into a whinging girl when he went through his change, or it would have become a cliche. Veela! Draco anyone? Just for that you get a happy fangirl squeal. ;)

That's not the only thing to love about this story, of course. I love the various reactions throughout the school to their bond; Smith's reaction was a very nice touch.

The kidnapping and the torture they both go through until they're reunited was so touching, and also pretty draining. I also don't trust Hilde, from the beginning she struck me as two faced. :-p The oath they took only clinched it for me. I have a feeling she'll try something later on. ;)

There was only one thing that threw me off the story, and that was in the first five chapters or so. Like other reviewers, the repeated use of dark haired youth or blond haired youth got a little annoying. Not a flame, just an honest opinion. You cut down on that in the latter chapters, which made me so happy. :) :) :) That's really my only quibble, everything else was excellent.

Friending you, and I can't wait for the sequel! I hope it doesn't take long.
Berenberen_writes on 5th February 2004 08:00 (UTC)
Re:
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I have to say, this is one of the more original H/D fics out there,
Thank you, I'm flattered.

Veela! Draco anyone?
I think there are some things to be said for Veela!Draco :) he's just been done badly in lots of cases so he's turned into a bit of a cliche. And as far as I'm concerned Harry could never turn into a whining girl ::g::.

Smith's reaction was a very nice touch.
He wrote himself in as soon as I finished OotP. Read the scene with the DA and my little brain started formulating how to use him. Never waste an antagonist; that's my motto :).

I also don't trust Hilde
LOL ... poor Hilde, people really think she's a snake waiting to strike. She's a Hufflepuff; she took the oath; what could be less suspicious? ::eg::

As to the "dark haired" stuff :) ... I'm in the process of re-editing now ::g::. I'm up to chapter 34 and when it's done I shall repost.
(no subject) - lady_suzuran on 5th February 2004 08:34 (UTC) (Expand)
Re: - beren_writes on 5th February 2004 08:46 (UTC) (Expand)
that kate girl is a bitch.oohlala on 12th February 2004 00:44 (UTC)
Amazing work, I am at a complete loss for words. Everything about this story is perfect, great work! I friended you awhile back, I hope thats alright?
Berenberen_writes on 12th February 2004 08:51 (UTC)
Re:
Thank you, I'm very pleased you enjoyed the fic.
I have friended you back ... sorry I didn't spot you when you first did it.
RoseleaSherer.com - Fabaloss!horsey_rose on 18th February 2004 03:32 (UTC)
Argggg you evil evil person!!
I don't think I'll be able to go back to J.K's Harry Potter and enjoy it as much anymore because theres no Draco/Harry lurveee (unless there is...??)

But my gawdddd what a story!!

I'm never one for lovey dovey fluffy crap, so for me to like this story means your one HELL of a writer to do it so well even *I* got all emotional and smoochy :P

Mehhhhh I luff it, shall friend you incase you have anymore brainwaves!

X
Berenberen_writes on 19th February 2004 08:07 (UTC)
Re:
Sorry it took me so long to reply, I've been in bed with a nasty bug for the last three days.

Argggg you evil evil person!!
Thank you, I do my best :).

because theres no Draco/Harry lurveee (unless there is...??)
Of course there is ... it's all canon I tell you, all canon! Oh dear, the cold medicine is really getting to me ::g::.

Seriously, thank you for your kind words, they mean a lot to me. I hope you enjoy the sequel when I finally finish it.
(no subject) - ladysilvrene on 29th August 2004 21:13 (UTC) (Expand)
Krissiekrissielee on 6th March 2004 08:45 (UTC)
I just finished the whole lot of it, and I must say, you're a very talented writer. My biggest complaint is that there were still some things that could be betaed out. If you want, I can do that for you fairly quickly. Like, find the mistakes and point them out type of correcting. Because those few mistakes sort of took me out of the story, you know?

But anyway. I loved this story. Great characterization, great plot, just...great. I smiled, I teared up, I was happy, sad, and it was beautiful.

I recced this on my journal. Hope you don't mind, but I'll be forcing it down my friend's throats...
Nattery: sillynefernat on 25th March 2004 02:53 (UTC)
Wonderful story!
Have read this story and absolutely loved it! Will write a review later, when I have a bit more time to do so. And also, I´ve added you, if that´s ok. Bye, Nathalie
Beren: hp mixupberen_writes on 25th March 2004 03:00 (UTC)
Re: Wonderful story!
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it. I friended you back :).
Re: Wonderful story! - nefernat on 25th March 2004 11:25 (UTC) (Expand)
(Anonymous) on 13th April 2004 14:33 (UTC)
praise and questions
I absolutely love this story! I had to print myself up a copy of it so I can read it when I'm not at my computer (I managed to squeeze it down to 232 pages, but it's still a big stack of paper to haul around)! ;-)

I did have a couple of questions, though. One, you never did go into the "animagus stuff." Ron said that they were all animagi, but you didn't say what Harry or Ron or Hermione turned into in their animagi forms. Perhaps you'll mention that in the sequel. That would be interesting...

Two, I found it a little out of character for Hermione to talk about having the house elves bring Harry and Draco food--wouldn't she have said she'd bring it up herself (or something like that) given that she thinks that house-elf enslavement is horrible?

Those were my only burning questions, other than the fact that I absolutely can't wait for the sequel! This is the best Harry/Draco story idea I've read so far, and I just love it!

AprilLily
Beren: snarked:behind youberen_writes on 14th April 2004 01:08 (UTC)
Re: praise and questions
I'm flattered - I have yet to print it out myself :). I've been meaning to so I can put it in a binder and file it away, just incase the dozen or so copies I have in electronic format should all spontaneously combust at the same time ::g:: (paranoid, moi?)

The animagus stuff has a part to play in the sequel.

As for Hermione - the way I look at it she wants to free them, but she doesn't want to see them out of work. Dobby is free and hence I don't see her minding asking Dobby for a favour, especially since then she could be sure Draco and Harry will be very well provided for.

Thank you so much for the feedback.
Re: praise and questions - ladysilvrene on 29th August 2004 21:17 (UTC) (Expand)
(Anonymous) on 17th May 2004 05:19 (UTC)
Dahlias here. just wondering....
Will there be a sequal anytime soon? if there is yipee and if not well why don't you? ^_^


if anything my adress is dahlias114@sbcglobal.net
Beren: Remus Friendshipberen_writes on 28th February 2005 08:45 (UTC)
Re: Dahlias here. just wondering....
There will be a sequel, I'm just not sure how soon :).
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